gazing aimlessly at the star studded sky,
i connect the silver dots to form a pattern...
and all i can see up there is,
a little less of you and me,
and a little more of us!!
wondering how it could have been,
trying to ignore what should have been...
i find myself struggling to focus on reality,
but all in vain, i slip into an abyss of endless dreams,
only to wake up again and remind myself,
that life is, what it has always been,
a little more of you and me,
and a little less of us!!
good one..
ReplyDeletevery well writtern , Take care!
ReplyDeleteA MILLION DOLLAR REWARD FOR ANYONE WHO TELLS ME WHO THE SECRET "YOU" IN PRI'S POSTS IS :D
ReplyDeletethat was really good..
ReplyDeletekeep up the good work!!!
nice
ReplyDeletenice...
ReplyDeleten a li'l more of us is wat most of us are looking for haan!
Sahi hai... You know its a poem , to mere jaise gavar kya bole..but LUCID dreams arent generally supposed to be bad you know that ?
ReplyDeleteone of your best pri.loved it
ReplyDelete"a little more of us"...
ReplyDeleteWonderful lines...
cheers :-)
@ suree, srivats, amal, pratz and shruti
ReplyDeletethanks for the kind words :)
@ rahul
i would suggest you to invest those million dollars carefully instead!
and if u really want to give them away like that, then maybe il'l tell u the answer myself :p
@ pavi!!
i guess so..or maybe, we are looking for the 'us' we see in our dreams! :)
@ enduringspirit
duh! i never said that.
infact dreams are always lucid..its reality which is a blur!! :)
btw welcome back!
@ karthik s
ReplyDeletethanks buddy...long time! hows u doing? :)
loved it dear!! amazingly written
ReplyDeletefan ho gaya aapka
i wanna write poems too now
ReplyDeletechriz
beautiful contrasts :)
ReplyDeletewell written mate... take care.. cheers...
ahhh...sweet and romantic...
ReplyDeletevery well written...!
mesmerising words!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteif this is not fiction i can only envy the person for whom it is written :)
LOL!
ReplyDeletethis is beautiful!! luvly!!
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful and thought provoking... and the clarity..simply amazing!
ReplyDeletesometimes its good not to have a "us"
ReplyDelete@ dream catcher
ReplyDeletei am flattered..thanks :)
@ chriz
ya sure..why dont u try ur hand at the serious stuff for a change :)
@ arv
thanks...but sometimes these contrasts can be pretty painful too :)
@ prasad
ReplyDeletedanke! :)
@ anonymous
and i can only wonder why anybody would need to use an anonymous handle to say that :)
thanks neways!
@ enduring spirit
u find that funny?? now im confused :o
@ sawan
thankyou :)
@ darklordreturns
ReplyDeletethankyou...not everyone has the patience to see the clarity despite the blur! :)
@ mayz
and sometimes u just cannot manage to convince urself that, no matter how much u try!! :)
the one who loves you will want to turn your every dream into reality!
ReplyDeletelove does not destroy dreams.it destroys the line between reality and dreams
Absolutely love the last two lines!..
ReplyDeleteGood work,Pri !
This is so cool...
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work..
@ anonymous
ReplyDeletei have to agree with u on this---lucky are those who have found such love! :)
@ crystal
danke!
@ blogboy
thankyou
its been quite a while since u last visited here..hows u doing??
amazing work... really well written.. gives the special strength to the last lines..
ReplyDeleteThe Colors Magazine
nicely written pri :)..
ReplyDeleteurs..hemu..
the dream was beautiful :)
ReplyDeletelovely and beautifully written :)
loved it :)
@ lena, hemanth and veens
ReplyDeletethankyou :)