October 03, 2018

#FlashFiction: Emotional atyachaar

She gazed in his eyes a little too long, her face inches away from his.
The tension in the air was thick. A million thoughts were creating havoc in his mind. There was anxiety writ on her face as well.

It took hardly a minute. But the solace it brought would last a while.

"Fundus normal. No evidence of macular or retinal changes," she smiled, scribbling down his latest report.

The diabetic heaved a sigh of relief. He wouldn't need to visit the Ophthalmology department for the next six months at least.


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  2. This was really an emotional atyachar. What looked like a romantic beginning ended up as a doctor and patient conversation. Remarkable twist :DD

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  3. Hahaha! Good one, doc! Your professional syndrome reflects here;)

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  5. @ Preeti Negi
    Thanks Preeti. A doctor's appointment is mostly perceived that way, no? :D
    One of my patients always tells me that.

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  6. @ Aditi
    Haha...can't help it at times. Consider it an occupational hazard! ;)

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  7. This was exceptionally well written. Somehow I had a feeling that this was about a cheating spouse but you took me by complete surprise. Well written.

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