September 05, 2018

#MicroFiction - 'Besotted'


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“She’s the most selfish creature I’ve ever seen. I don’t know why you love her so much.”

He laughed. His friend was trying to stuff sense into him again.

But that’s not the way love functioned. What he felt for her was unconditional.

“If I were you, I’d have thrown her out of the house already,” his friend frowned. “She does a fine job keeping you on your toes. And for what?” he paused for effect. “Does she even acknowledge the attention? No! Always acting high and mighty, the queen that she is.”


It was true. She literally owned him and there were times he felt she didn’t care at all.

“But just because they don’t love you the way you want, doesn’t mean it’s not love, no?” he reminded himself.

Even now he could feel her eyes on him from the other side of the room.  The expression on her face was smug, reserved only for those who had the liberty of living life, nine times over.

Stretching on the davenport, she stifled a bored yawn and resumed to lick her majestic Persian fur.

“Quit trying,” she hissed at the friend. “He is not going anywhere.”

Then meowing sweetly at her besotted human, she jumped in his lap for her daily dose of belly rubs, and purred authoritatively.
“Not without my permission.”

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147 comments:

Deliciously Alive said...

Hahahahaha! Never guessed it would be a cat! Good one!

Anagha Yatin said...

That was a catty twist! Secret well kept under the fur!!!
Brilliant narration and flow Doc! Loved every bit of it.

Pri said...

@ Deliciously alive
Thank you. I am glad the twist in the tale (or should we say,'tail') got you laughing ;)

Pri said...

@ Anagha
Thanks Anagha. I am glad you liked it. <3

Vartika said...

hahahah good one, never thought its a cat. Thanks for the morning laughter :)s

Meenakshi said...

Haha..interesting narrative.I could never guess it to be a Cat !!

Sudha said...

Brilliant narration. Loved the meowing twist at the end. It bought more than a smile on my face.

anupriya said...

Through the beginning I kept wondering how come a man can love someone so much, and then I dawned on me, before you revealed the identity. Nicely written

Unknown said...

Haha such a kitty twist..loved it...

Pooja Tripathi said...

Amazingly penned

Rashi Roy said...

Twist in the Tail!

Jheelam said...

It's on my bucket-list to pet a Persian cat one day and being boss around by her/him. Loved your catty tale (or tail) and with the cutest twist possible.

Pragnya Mishra said...

Till the end I could never guess it was a cat. Funny one.

Manas Mukul said...

Lovely twist to the mini tale. Nice work Priyanka.
#MyFriendAlexa #ContemplationOfaJoker #Jokerophilia

Unknown said...

I somehow had an inkling that "She" was a cat because the way you described her seemed exactly like cats behave. And that's a compliment to your writing that I guessed it right!

Novemberschild (Romila) said...

I love such twists and twirls in the story.

aditi said...

Lol...loved the twist n tail in single write-up! 😂❤️

Anshu Bhojnagarwala said...

Ha ha ha, wouldn't have guessed it was a cat. Nice funny twist!

Unknown said...

ha ha ha... what a twisting tale of a cat... loved it

Unknown said...

I love cats. Yes they are selfish creatures. But they purr.

Neha Tambe said...

haha! I always imagined cats to be cunning, your post just cemented my belief!

Pri said...

@ Unknown
You're most welcome. I'm glad it gout you laughing :D

Pri said...

@ Meenakshi
Thanks. I am happy I could maintain the suspense ;)

Pri said...

@ Sidha
Thanks. I am glad you liked it. :)

Pri said...

@ Anupriya
Hahaha...thanks dear.
I agree. Never has it been known that a man loved a woman as much! ;)

Pri said...

@ Unknown 2
Thank you :)

Pri said...

@ Pooja
Thanks Pooja :)

Pri said...

@ Rashi
Indeed!
Thanks for dropping by :)

Pri said...

@ Jheelam
Thanks dear.
As for the Persian cat, be careful what you're wishing for ;)

Pri said...

@ Pragnya
Purpose served then! :)
Thanks for visiting my space...

Pri said...

@ Manas
Thanks Manas :)

Pri said...

@ Mahak
Thanks dear. You seem to be a cat person! :)

Pri said...

@ Novembers Child
Ah! Then you need to visit my space more often ;)

Pri said...

@ Aditi
Thanks dear :)

Pri said...

@ Anshu
Thanks Anshu. I am glad you liked it :)

Pri said...

@ Nidhi
Thank you Nidhi :)

Pri said...

@ Abhijit
Yes, they do. On a somewhat related note, you should pick up 'The Dalai Lama's cat'by David Michie. If you're a ailurophile, you will love reading it :)

Richa Mina said...

nice short story..

Sonia Chatterjee said...

Short and crisp. Kept me hooked on till the end.

SUJATA TAWDE said...

Hey Priyanka, liked your micro fiction. After reading so much Jefferey Archers , I never imagined this twist in the tale , that's the power of your story writing skill. #MyFriendAlexa #SujatawdeReads

Priyal said...

Hahaha I thought it's going to be a different love story but at the end it's about cat . Beautifully written

ʞɐ said...

This was interesting and great narrative. :)

However I do have a suggestion with regards to the blog layout, if I may. The comment section : A pop up window will let one jot down the thoughts, but ideally from a readers's perspective it is bit of a stretch and as we all want ease, it would be a little bit better if the comment section is embedded after the post. Well, this is my opinion though.

Suchita said...

See I knew it would be some sort of an animal. Mighty clever though.

Unknown said...

I didn't see it coming. Hilarious story.

Unknown said...

Loved reading thru this, it’s a small but mighty post 😅

theprivatesocialite said...

Ha ha...It's a cat ! Just loved reading it.

Pri said...

@ Richa
Thank you :)

Pri said...

@ Sonia
Thanks Sonia. I'm glad you liked it :)

deepti menon said...


Such a 'purr'fect twist! :)Short, sweet and effective!
#DeepTiesReads #MyFriendAlexa

Monalisa Dey said...

Hey.. it was a great read. Thanks for writing such a lovely story😄

bellybytes said...

Cats aren't my favourite creatures but I loved this story. What a delightful read it was.

Tina Acharya said...

ha ha ha...Its such sweet story. Only when the word Persian fur came...i guessed its the Cat. Loved the way you narrated. Wonderful

Harjeet Kaur said...

I am no animal lover but I did split into a grin at the end. That is great micro-storytelling.
#wordsmithkaurreads

Sanjota Grampurohit said...

Lol.. I was thinking about the cruelty of that man. Then the suspense revealed!! Interesting one :)

Unknown said...

Didn't see that coming. It was hilarious. Lovely twist in the tale.

Unknown said...

I never guessed it to be a feline creature. Good twist and look at the overconfident cat!!!!
#mannreads

Unknown said...

Very intriguing crafted story and the perfect twist in the end justifies the strong opening scenes. Never easy to personify animals in such short space of setting and plotting.
:D

Preeti's Panorama said...

I am thoroughly impressed by your writing style. In a few words how you have played with the emotions and thoughts of readers is truly commendable. It was a CAT!!! Who would have thought so... Not me for sure :)
And the last line - Not without my permission. WOW!!
So glad I came across your blog

Prerna Wahi said...

Haha. Interesting unexpected twist. Enjoyed it!

Preethi Venugopala said...

haha...nice story.

Puspanjalee said...

An intrinteres twist at the end! Loved it

Purba chakraborty said...

Awesome twist

Beyond Horizon said...

Feline! They always love the attention. :D

Unknown said...

LOL good one. I never guessed it will meow :)

Dipali Bhasin said...

A feline bent to the tale. Short , sweet , interesting. My tow labs at home are the men in my life who keep me on my toes too. Totally related to the story. Loved it!

Dipali
( https://www.spoonsandsneakers.com/ )

Unknown said...

haha! loved reading this

Anmol Rawat said...

That twist in the tale! :D :D
Good one :)

Milan said...

Short and sweet with a twist in the end. Loved it

Vandana Mathur said...

Lovely twist to the take. I had no inkling it would end this way.

Geethica said...

I could never imagine that it was a cat. Nice suspense till the end.

Jayanthi said...

Too good... :)

Deepa said...

Haha nice story and an interesting twist at the end. Enjoyed the story.

Neha Sharma said...

Haha, that's a funny twist. I got the idea it was a cat. Loved it!

Varsha said...

I love cats :)
This was an intriguing story :p
#vigorousreads #MyFriendAlexa

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Shubhra said...

Nice story, one can never find out till the end that you are talking about a cat. #MyFriendAlexa

Supriya said...

Ha ha ha... I so hate the cats.... cunning they are no... this one was hilarious

Dr Roshan Radhakrishnan said...

Nicely done :)

Well written!

Jayanthy said...

Okay, trust me, I couldn't laugh any less! I still laugh at the story! Short and sweet entry!! You are a lovely writer!

Unknown said...

Fun twist at the denouement. Love does make people completely blind, dumb and deaf like the three monkeys of Gandhi.

Alpana Deo said...

What a twist. For a while I started to think how can he love someone like this. But it turned out to be a kitty cat...hilarious. Awesome read.
#MothersGurkulreads #Myfriendalexa

Nayantara said...

That was unexpected. I actually thought it must be the maid. Cant live with them nor without. hahha

Surbhi prapanna said...

Haha this is really a great twist. enjoyed reading it

Surabhi said...

Brilliant story! Loved every bit of it. I am getting addicted to your stories. Kudos Pri!

Deepali said...

Wow...loved the twist. Nice read.

The Solitary Writer said...

Hha I never thought it could be a cat. Its funny but well written my friend!

The Solitary Writer

Kinshoo said...

Haha OMG loved the twist. Superb narration and suspense well maintained. Keep writing!!
#MyFriendAlexa #momlearningwithbaby #Blogchatter

Agnivo said...

That was an unexpected twist! Haha!

Varsh said...

My, it was a cat! And here I was feeling sorry that the friend was pushing him to get divorced or something.
Very nicely done, Priyanka! Words used intelligently and with precise expressions.

Gunjan(tuggu.n.mommy) said...

Hahha.. nice one. Like the twist

Shilpa Gupte said...

Hahaha! I liked that!I was wondering who this 'high and mighty lady' is, until I read about her Persian fur! Of course, it had to be Ms. Kitty...the Selfish One! :P

Ranjini Sankar said...

Hahhaha something I always tell my friend. Cats are cunning, and don't care and prtepre like they own the humans.

Monika said...

Loved your catty fiction . Keep writing .

Sashwata Roy said...

Beautifully twisted! Loved it

Haimanti said...

Hahaha... What a twist! Very interesting narrative as well!

Ishieta said...

haha.. absolutely agree... our furries own us, and we are happy :) there is an unparalleled joy when your pet looks at you and sits with you.. just happy to be :)

Sejal Khanna said...

I wouldnt have guessed!! hahahaha!

Pooja Kawatra said...

Love that mystery and suspense which kept me glued until the end. It is very well structured and nice.

Paresh Godhwani said...

Haha, I never thought it would be a cat. Simply loved the twist in the end.

Unknown said...

And it was a cat! Funny twist, well done.

sugar N spice cookies said...

Fabulous Fabulous Fab-u-lous
loved it and how!
It brew up romance in me and then....what a play with words...too good.

Rashmi said...

Ahh! So, the authoritative cat is finally out of the bag! Loved the twist at the end Priyanka.

Dishki said...

Was not expecting this purry twist in the end. :)

Veena Haridas said...

This is so true for my husband right now! In our case Mr. Richard Parker rules :) :) :)

Lancelot Quadras said...

And my my, I never expected a cat. But indeed sometimes cat do have that look where you don't kjnow if they love you or if they are bored. Cheers!!

Pri said...

@ Richa
Thanks Richa :)

Pri said...

@ Lancelot
Well, That's the thing about cats. Unpredictable creatures, moody in both loyalty and in love :)

Pri said...

@ Veena
Hahaha...I love that name! ;)

Pri said...

@ Dishki
Err...let's just say surprising people is my forte! ;)

Pri said...

@ Rashmi
Thanks Rashmi. I am glad you liked it :)

Pri said...

@ Sugar n spice
Thank youu! *blush*

Pri said...

@ Lavanya
Thanks Lavanya. I am glad you liked it :)

Pri said...

@ Paresh
Thanks Paresh. :D

Pri said...

@ Pooja
Thanks dear. I'm glad you found it worth your time! :)

Pri said...

@ Sejal
And I wouldn't have wanted you to! ;)

Pri said...

@ Ishieta
You seem to know the feeling rather too well. I am so glad you could relate :D

Pri said...

@ Haimanti
Thanks dear. I am glad it made you laugh :D

Pri said...

@ Sashwata
Thank you :)

Pri said...

@ Monika
Thanks Monika :)

Pri said...

@ Ranjini
Indeed! You are absolutely correct. 'Cunning' is their middle name :D

Pri said...

@ Shilpa
Thanks dear. I'm glad you enjoyed it :D

Pri said...

@ Gunjan
Thanks Gunjan. I'm glad it got you laughing :D

Pri said...

@ Varsh
Thanks Varsh. I'm glad you liked it :D

Pri said...

@ Agnivo
Thanks Agnivo. I'm glad it made you laugh :D

Pri said...

@ Kinshoo
Thanks Kinshoo. I am glad you enjoyed reading it :)

Pri said...

@ The solitary writer
Thanks. I'm glad it took you by surprise :D

Pri said...

@ Deepali
Thanks Deepali :)

Pri said...

@ Surabhi
Aww...thanks dear. The pleasure of that addiction is as much mine as yours :)

Pri said...

@ Surbhi Prapanna
Thanks Surbhi :)

Pri said...

@ Nayantara
Haha...true! But your ending would suit a woman more.
Men don't generally care much about housework, at least not as much as they love their pets.

Pri said...

@ Alpana
True! A man who loves a woman like that is a myth! :D

Pri said...

@ Varad
Touche! :)

Pri said...

@ Jayanthy
Thanks Jayanthy. I will revel in that compliment for the rest of the day :D

Pri said...

@ Roshan
Thanks Rosh :)

Pri said...

@ Supriya
Hahaha...cunning indeed! Sometimes I think they are plain diabolical :-|

Vasantha Vivek said...

Cat made me nuts. Lucky it was. Good twist to the romantic story.

Ishita Hurkat said...

Such a cool twist at the end. Cats really are like snooty royalty.

Keerthi Vydyula said...

That was one of a kind twist! Didn't see that coming... :-D

Pri said...

@ Shubhra
Thanks. I am glad you were surprised! :D

Pri said...

@ Yogeeta
Ah! Thank you. I was so sure the ailurophiles would relate to this one :D

Pri said...

@ Neha
Thanks Neha. One can only keep the suspense going for so long :D

Pri said...

@ Deepa
Thank you, Deepa. I'm glad you liked it :)

Pri said...

@ Jayanthi
Gracias! :D

Pri said...

@ Geethica
Thanks Geethica. I am glad it got you by surprise!:D

Pri said...

@ Vandana
THaha. Thanks Vandana. I am glad that twist in the 'tail' came out just fine :D

Pri said...

@ Milan
Thanks Milan. I'm glad you liked it :)

Rashi Mital said...

Hahaha.. hilarious. I could have never guessed it would be a cat. It all fits in the end. Loved the attitude in the line, she licked her Persian fur and jumped in his lap for the daily dose of belly rub. Amazing. #LiveItYoungReads #MyFriendAlexa